Hello GB. Looking for an honest opinion on a song I wrote. I don't write very often, but have always been extremely interested in lyrics and songwriting.
I just found out recently that my grandfather is passing away from lung cancer. As a way to process, I decided to jot some words down about what he meant to me, as well as reflect on the cycle of grandfather/dad/son/grandson.
I thought it would be cool to hear from an outsider's perspective and get some feedback, as I like the idea of writing more often. I really enjoyed being able to process in this way. Are they good? Bad? Any honest feedback is welcome and extremely appreciated.
FTR, this song would be more likely to be in the Classic Country to Texas Country. Slow tempo, Key of E.
Late edit: How it turned out
I just found out recently that my grandfather is passing away from lung cancer. As a way to process, I decided to jot some words down about what he meant to me, as well as reflect on the cycle of grandfather/dad/son/grandson.
I thought it would be cool to hear from an outsider's perspective and get some feedback, as I like the idea of writing more often. I really enjoyed being able to process in this way. Are they good? Bad? Any honest feedback is welcome and extremely appreciated.
FTR, this song would be more likely to be in the Classic Country to Texas Country. Slow tempo, Key of E.
Late edit: How it turned out
Quote:
My father called the other day he was hesitant to tell me
That the Lord is coming it's been a good ride but your months are counted
Now I reflect on what is true and memories you leave me knowing
I would not be the same man if it wasn't for your love and counsel
From ball games to our family farm there's a reason they call you coach And
I hope that the care you showed me translates to this piece of land
Chorus:
What kind of man would I be
If you hadn't cared for me?
Verse 2 (Dad)
I imagine how you processed it as you realize that forever is here
The years you spent taking care of him all of the doctors you've seen
Is there a feeling of relief knowing that he'll be in his forever home or does the
Fact you'll never call another person your daddy hit harder than you think?
Bridge (The Cycle)
Now the cycle continues with you and me in our next section
There is nothing you keep there is only your reflection
Chorus reprise:
What kind of man would I be
If you hadn't cared for me?
Would I be some emotionless depiction
An absentee shadow not one for conversation?
Would the work you put in me fall into thin air
All gone to waste for my son none to share
And where do we go from here? The choice you both have shown me
Let's spend the rest of these golden years reliving all of these old memories
Outro
My father called the other day he could barely wait to tell me
Son do you want to go for a ride or maybe just go fishing